http://www.nytimes.com/2013/02/26/world/asia/in-india-missing-school-to-work-in-the-mine.html?hp&_r=0
On February 2013, Gardiner Harris writes about the condition of life for some children living in India. He starts off by describing all the little details of the children who work on mines, he describes their clothing to the emotion they constantly feel. The writer uses different statistics to show how poverty, corruption, among other things are common in India, making it hard to have a simple and pleasant life, specially in places like Meghalaya. Meghalaya, as Harris describes it, is an isolated state that is located between China, Bhutan, Bangladesh and Myanmar. Gardiner Harris uses exemplification by telling different stories of kids and teenagers who do have any other chance is life, kids that can't see a future ahead of them. He also wrote about an orphan child who was forced to work at the mines.
Harris' purpose in writing this essay was to make those situations known by people all over the world. He uses exemplification and statistics to make people want to change this situation in any way. He clearly believes in a change that can only be done by the people, by every person doing something to help kids and teenagers in need.
In your blog, you could have talked about the rhetorical strategies the author used to convey his thoughts. There are some grammatical and spelling errors, but good job on showing how the author build up his trust with the readers. (:
ReplyDelete-This sentence doesn't make sense ˜he describes their clothing to the emotion they constantly feel.˜
ReplyDelete-punctuation in ˜the writer uses different statistics to .." besides adding an "and" before "corruption", "among other things" should be inside commas:
"(...) different statistics to show how poverty and corruption, among other things, are common in India, making it hard to have a simple and ...."
-the last sentence of the first paragraph feels out of place.