Sunday, February 24, 2013

26. Why Some People Are More Likely to Catch a Cold

http://healthland.time.com/2013/02/22/why-some-people-are-more-likely-to-catch-a-cold/


                This article is very short, but contains some very interesting information that some people may find useful.  Writer Yue Wang discusses how some people may be more likely to catch a cold than others.  Wang uses a couple of sources and quotes for her small article, seeing that she did not need much on this topic, colds, after all, are not the worst thing that could happen to a person.

                Seeing that Wang is an intern and this is the only article of hers cached on time’s website, it would not be fair to be harsh with her.  She could have done a little better in how she produced her information; it was a bit dull to read.  She did, though, go to the length to gather information from a journal, CBS News, and Researcher Sheldon Cohen of Carnegie Mellon University about her subject.

1 comment:

  1. This sentence is a bit awkward "Wang uses a couple of sources and quotes for her small article, seeing that she did not need much on this topic, colds, after all, are not the worst thing that could happen to a person." It's kind of a run-on, but the real problem is the final clause "cold, after all, are not the worst thing that could happen to a person," because it comes right after a comma and it all doesn't flow well.
    I also thought the second paragraph lacked rhetorical analysis, but apart from that, you wrote really well (:

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