2. A Saudi Woman Embarks on a 'Faceless Experiment'
http://www.theatlanticcities.com/authors/sarah-goodyear/
Sarah Goodyear's article, "A Saudi Woman Embarks on a 'Faceless Experiment" introduces a Saudi native woman, Rana Jarbou, who, through a one-week experiment of wearing a niqab, concludes that such traditional forms of modest women clothing do not necessarily provide protection from the potential sexual harassment and lust from men but rather work as a 'mask', wearing on a woman's sense of herself. In introducing Jarbou, Goodyear quotes her, who tells that she is considered rebellious in her country because she does not conceal herself like the other Arabian women, even exposing her hair. Goodyear also recognizes the discrimination faced by niqab-wearing women living outside of their countries, where they often meet such policies that don't allow them to keep their veils on, as in driver's licence photos or while attending universities. Jarbou's purpose of her experiment was to explore the trade offs between the security and protection supposed to be provided by the niqab and the way it might affect her "sense of identity and individuality". During her experiment, she experienced some people's respect of her privacy as opposed to the "staring pairs of eyes" without her niqab. However, she also realized that men still stared, and "even gave looks, grins or whispered something". Jarbou affirms that the niqab "does not eliminate the interaction between men and women but only acts as a mask, concealing her identity and restricting her from fully being herself.
The purpose of this article is to address the question of the purpose and the effectiveness of the niqab and other traditional concealment of women through clothing: is it worth it to conceal even the identity of a woman to prevent and protect from scrutiny or possible harassment? Sarah Goodyear constantly refers to direct quotes from Rana Jarbou and keeps a clinical tone of language in order to clearly and objectively report the contents of Jarbou's story to the intended audience of men and women who take curiosity in the differences of cultural values and morals.
-1st sentence super condensed with info. Not always a bad thing, but it's information overload for the reader to start with.
ReplyDelete- " 'mask', wearing on a woman's sense of herself."
-for this part (above), puncutation inside of the quotation 'mask,' and the second part, "woman's sense of herself"... is confusing.
-remember for ALL quotations, your puncutation needs to be inside your quotation, the opposite of the Portugeuse writing rules.
-You have two places where you state the author's purpose, that's usually a one point argument, so make sure that if you state it two different times, it doesn't contradict your previous purpose statement.
"In introducing Jarbou, Goodyear quotes her, who tells that she is considered rebellious in her country because she does not conceal herself like the other Arabian women, even exposing her hair."
-the two phrases at the beginning of this quote don't mesh well. You could simply say, "Goodyear's introduction of Jarbou is supported by a quote that highlights..."
-Interesting article!