http://www.theatlantic.com/health/archive/2012/06/study-male-doctors-make-12-000-more-than-female-doctors-per-year/258388/
In Hans Villarica's article of June 13, 2012, "Study: Male Doctors Make $12,000 More Than Female Doctors Per Year", he discusses about the difference between thepayment of female and male doctors. He divides the article into five section: problem, methodology, results, conclusion, and implication, and he clearly states the facts of each division. Villarica discusses about studies which shows that the difference of the salary is due to the difference of work hours, productivity, and specialization. He surveyed many physicians with similar situations of work and was still able to find a difference of $12,000 between the male's and female's pay. He reveals the average payment of the doctors and men is able to make more than the women. Villarica's co-author, Peter Ubel, is against this discrimination and says that male and female should not have this difference. He shows his feeling by stating, "A person's salary should not depend upon whether they have a Y chromosome".
Villarica's purpose is to express the injustice between the two genders and to conclude that the studies that say that the difference is due to different conditions of work is wrong. In the division that states the conclusion, he clearly states that male physicians have a higher payment than the female co-workers. They both work at similar specialization under the same conditions, yet receive different ammount of pay. The author pursues the answer for the problem of the salary and is able to find it. Making the doctors who did not know about this discrimination and other people come to know the truth, that male make more money than the female physicians.
-don't need to state the date of the article in the first sentence
ReplyDelete-"Study: Male Doctors Make $12,000 More Than Female Doctors Per Year",
* comma goes inside the puctuation, "More than Female Doctors Per Year,"
-"Villarica discusses about studies which shows "
* Should be "Villarica supports his argument (doesn't have to be argument) by including studies that show..."
-Keep the tense the same, you go back and forth between past/present
-interesting article